tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33555282.post2791743270372694162..comments2014-07-14T14:52:59.684-04:00Comments on Grey Pemaquid: AntsSashahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00483234172434544811noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33555282.post-22727012384866252892007-06-29T01:49:00.000-04:002007-06-29T01:49:00.000-04:00I don't think I'll ever look at ants quite the sam...I don't think I'll ever look at ants quite the same way again!<BR/><BR/>That was wonderfully composed. You're very talented. Keep writing! ;pIrenehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11510297318390124951noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33555282.post-67198574648301504162007-06-29T00:42:00.000-04:002007-06-29T00:42:00.000-04:00A sort of CHIASMUS in form, yes?A sort of CHIASMUS in form, yes?Joyce Ellen Davishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13494251587598676788noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33555282.post-29697450053375421272007-06-29T00:39:00.000-04:002007-06-29T00:39:00.000-04:00This is really great--very interesting form, and y...This is really great--very interesting form, and you have done so well with it! GOOD JOB!Joyce Ellen Davishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13494251587598676788noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33555282.post-36994477491763617792007-06-29T00:12:00.000-04:002007-06-29T00:12:00.000-04:00I loved the construction of this and how the meani...I loved the construction of this and how the meaning changed (yet stayed the same). Very, very cool!chicklegirlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03000215636803243874noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33555282.post-90083555185266439372007-06-28T22:29:00.000-04:002007-06-28T22:29:00.000-04:00I LOVE this. I find it very effective and powerful...I LOVE this. I find it very effective and powerful -- beautiful too! Great message in it, also.Clarehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11746014771712020963noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33555282.post-25705532472736683242007-06-28T18:43:00.000-04:002007-06-28T18:43:00.000-04:00I had to reread my copy of Native Guard to remind ...I had to reread my copy of Native Guard to remind myself of Tretheway's poem. Wow! And wow about yours! <BR/><BR/>The construction here is a marvel, as you pay such close attention to the possibilities of each line, what comes before and after.Jim Brockhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14408507847342833145noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33555282.post-56970167502263954712007-06-28T15:18:00.000-04:002007-06-28T15:18:00.000-04:00Very cool Sasha! I am not usually enamored with wr...Very cool Sasha! <BR/><BR/>I am not usually enamored with writing poems of preconceived structure -- but this is way cool... I will have to try one myself.Rob Kistnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11365982588165098990noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33555282.post-60521274837035714112007-06-28T13:12:00.000-04:002007-06-28T13:12:00.000-04:00this poem is amazing! i love the subject and the w...this poem is amazing! i love the subject and the way you have pieced the whole topic together. not only is it inspiring and a delight to read, it makes me pause to consider this myelf.<BR/><BR/>*WOW*Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33555282.post-26724505225209942422007-06-28T12:37:00.000-04:002007-06-28T12:37:00.000-04:00A new form to me and I love how it works. You did...A new form to me and I love how it works. You did an excellent job here. *clapping hands*Tammy Brierlyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14673290512175050093noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33555282.post-32086228621570545282007-06-28T12:29:00.000-04:002007-06-28T12:29:00.000-04:00Also, I'd really like to keep up with your blog, b...Also, I'd really like to keep up with your blog, but I'm lazy and use bloglines... have you thought about publishing an RSS feed? Pretty please?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33555282.post-11697558708900716262007-06-28T12:28:00.000-04:002007-06-28T12:28:00.000-04:00I read this a few days ago--found it through a lin...I read this a few days ago--found it through a link on another blog. It's really wonderful. I love that each half would work on its own as a poem, and together they show us even more. I think subject and images you've chosen are particularly strong.<BR/><BR/>I had never heard of this form before, and now I am also tempted to try... though it seems like quite a challenge!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33555282.post-53387456114144102742007-06-28T10:53:00.000-04:002007-06-28T10:53:00.000-04:00I am impressed with this. I need to try this. Than...I am impressed with this. I need to try this. Thanks for introducing this to us.<BR/><BR/>It works so well either way.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33555282.post-50098061394698839562007-06-28T08:41:00.000-04:002007-06-28T08:41:00.000-04:00Yes, I have. And. I have also compared them to us ...Yes, I have. And. I have also compared them to us in my mind. Great thoughts.tinamtlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07680312912081802924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33555282.post-67621709437107754082007-06-28T08:26:00.000-04:002007-06-28T08:26:00.000-04:00Wow - I need to go back over this one a couple of ...Wow - I need to go back over this one a couple of times, but it's a lovely work in this form. Awesome!Sr. Heatherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07927398954456388764noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33555282.post-56099741010118244932007-06-28T07:19:00.000-04:002007-06-28T07:19:00.000-04:00Great job; I like the form. But I'm not a fan of a...Great job; I like the form. But I'm not a fan of ants. :)paris parfaithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05457437124988976587noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33555282.post-44271547890518003272007-06-28T06:10:00.000-04:002007-06-28T06:10:00.000-04:00This works really well, the form is great, I like ...This works really well, the form is great, I like how the meaning changes in the second part. I also like how you've got so close to the ants. Ants are wonderful creatures!Crafty Green Poethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02486633917197181851noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33555282.post-25030795935098475872007-06-26T01:53:00.000-04:002007-06-26T01:53:00.000-04:00This is a wonderful poem. I think the folded lines...This is a wonderful poem. I think the folded lines work incredibly well. I like the imagery of the ants, the inclusion of a war motif--guns--and ther comparison to joy (quite suprising), and how the reader is drawn in. <BR/><BR/>Good, and good for you.Debhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14744896385434246402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33555282.post-40901564123366540182007-06-25T22:25:00.000-04:002007-06-25T22:25:00.000-04:00Okay -- now I'm not at work, so I can actually res...Okay -- now I'm not at work, so I can actually respond in detail. I love how the opening line because such a great single question at the end -- it's a great flip. <BR/><BR/>I like this also because it is so specific. You include such interesting details, that shift in perspective when read in reverse. And you added a rhyme, which I couldn't even attempt. Kudos! <BR/><BR/>I hope you don't mind, but I linked to your poem on my blog. :)Jessicahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09701158085304753313noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33555282.post-10439045493251703792007-06-25T18:14:00.000-04:002007-06-25T18:14:00.000-04:00I'll leave more comments later -- but great job! ...I'll leave more comments later -- but great job! This is fantastic. :)Jessicahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09701158085304753313noreply@blogger.com